Comments on: Six Sentence Sunday 04/29/2012

By: Robert Roman

Robert Roman — Tue, 01 May 2012 11:40:39 +0000

Glad you liked it! Writing Alondra is a challenge for a few reasons, so I’m always wondering if I got it right.

By: Ryan Derham

Ryan Derham — Mon, 30 Apr 2012 02:32:47 +0000

I like her stoic acceptance. The scene definitely catches my interest.

By: Robert Roman

Robert Roman — Sun, 29 Apr 2012 18:16:35 +0000

Thanks C.C.!

By: Robert Roman

Robert Roman — Sun, 29 Apr 2012 18:16:12 +0000

Thanks! I try to add in a deeper understanding, but it’s tough sometimes, especially when the POV character is… well… rather unlike me. Glad it comes through!

By: Robert Roman

Robert Roman — Sun, 29 Apr 2012 18:14:59 +0000

Hopefully next week’s installment (or the next after that?) will make the reasons for her hesitation clearer. Thanks for the compliments!

By: C.C. Williams

C.C. Williams — Sun, 29 Apr 2012 16:04:27 +0000

Fab 6, Robert! Kinda hard, kinda soft … liked it!

By: Kimberly K. Comeau

Kimberly K. Comeau — Sun, 29 Apr 2012 14:37:18 +0000

This excerpt begs the question of the woman’s relationship to the old man. I especially like your descriptions. They tell so much more than mere visual facts.

By: Kyoko Church

Kyoko Church — Sun, 29 Apr 2012 10:32:33 +0000

I like it! I like the nice, hard feel of your writing in this snippet. One question: if death is an old friend, why does she have to steel herself to put the mirror to his lips? Perhaps that’s explained once the broader picture is revealed, though. Good job!